Post by Chocolate on Feb 12, 2011 20:37:23 GMT
I decided to make this so if anyone needs support with writing that doesnt invovle angelic wars you can come here to get it.
I personally wanted to post my Prolouge for my story called Long Forgotten. I wanted some critism and thought that ya'll ight be the ones to be honest with me about it. n.n since noone else really is... Anyway here it is.
A soft wind blows through the trees, taking with it the life of the never ending forest. My foot crunched through the thin layers of leaves and into the soft earth below. I found myself slowly seeping into the ground, as if becoming one with the planet surrounding me. I took another step, picking up my pace as the forest become silent. I exhaled the breath that I had been holding hostage in my lungs as a rabbit scurried by my feet. It wasn't time for my departure yet.
I leaned agaisnt a near by oak tree, closing my eyes slightly. It had been days since I last slept. I could barely stay standing. I took in the sweet aroma of roses that tinted the air with its sweetness, letting it overwhelm me. No noise, not the slight rustle of leaves, nor the sound of muted paws hammering agaisnt the ground. It was time to go, but I didn't want to leave.
I tried to shut out the rest of the world, the golden leaves, the magnificent trees, the blue jays that sat on there branches, in hopes that he would dissapear and leave me to my peace in my safe Haven. "It is time to leave." His velvety voice said, coaxing me to turn around and face the angelic demon. At any other time I would have jumped at the oppurtunity to see his perfect face, molded by god himself no doubt, but now I couldn't stand to look at him, in fear that I might burst into tears. "So soon?" I asked, my voice ringing out like bells in the silence. I hoped that he would at least let me say good-bye to my perfect world. his wings rustled restlessly and I could just imagine the scowl on his face. I winced slightly just thinking about it.
He grabbed my arm, roughly, pulling me closer to him. "You know the rule." He whispered into my ears, my back pressed agaisnt his bare chest. I looked up into his gorgeous green eyes, knowing that I must have looked pathetic to him. I pulled away from him, closing my eyes as the tears finally won and rolled down my face. "Somehow, I thought this day would never come." I whispered as he led me out of the forest.
I personally wanted to post my Prolouge for my story called Long Forgotten. I wanted some critism and thought that ya'll ight be the ones to be honest with me about it. n.n since noone else really is... Anyway here it is.
A soft wind blows through the trees, taking with it the life of the never ending forest. My foot crunched through the thin layers of leaves and into the soft earth below. I found myself slowly seeping into the ground, as if becoming one with the planet surrounding me. I took another step, picking up my pace as the forest become silent. I exhaled the breath that I had been holding hostage in my lungs as a rabbit scurried by my feet. It wasn't time for my departure yet.
I leaned agaisnt a near by oak tree, closing my eyes slightly. It had been days since I last slept. I could barely stay standing. I took in the sweet aroma of roses that tinted the air with its sweetness, letting it overwhelm me. No noise, not the slight rustle of leaves, nor the sound of muted paws hammering agaisnt the ground. It was time to go, but I didn't want to leave.
I tried to shut out the rest of the world, the golden leaves, the magnificent trees, the blue jays that sat on there branches, in hopes that he would dissapear and leave me to my peace in my safe Haven. "It is time to leave." His velvety voice said, coaxing me to turn around and face the angelic demon. At any other time I would have jumped at the oppurtunity to see his perfect face, molded by god himself no doubt, but now I couldn't stand to look at him, in fear that I might burst into tears. "So soon?" I asked, my voice ringing out like bells in the silence. I hoped that he would at least let me say good-bye to my perfect world. his wings rustled restlessly and I could just imagine the scowl on his face. I winced slightly just thinking about it.
He grabbed my arm, roughly, pulling me closer to him. "You know the rule." He whispered into my ears, my back pressed agaisnt his bare chest. I looked up into his gorgeous green eyes, knowing that I must have looked pathetic to him. I pulled away from him, closing my eyes as the tears finally won and rolled down my face. "Somehow, I thought this day would never come." I whispered as he led me out of the forest.